hekategirl

Yeah, this is my first story in a while so I think I used 'blobs' in kind of a metaphor poem sense, so i'll have to work that out. Thanks!

About the "cat-scrathed" v "snake skin" debate; WHY WRITE SOMETHING IF IT DOESN"T MAKE SENSE TO YOU? NEVER WRITE SOMETHING BECAUSE YOU THINK IT SOUNDS COOL. Poetry communicates. It shouldn't ...

I don't know how to explain what reaction this poem gave me, it was refreshing almost. I like the format very much. And the ending: "Goodnight memories Wake up clear ...

The ending was....different...I'm not sure what exactly its sopposed to mean, but the first two stanzas were good. Maybe expand the poem so it explains more?

Prologue This story starts in a time of no time and a place of nowhere, where the whole race of people are blobs of nothing and you can tell them ...

I like this, defintly not your greatest but good. I like the second stanza, it gives a good image and also is a good metaphor. Nice job.

You do use the word 'Grey' alot but like you said that was kind of the whole point, and I hink titiling 'The Sea Of Gray' made that more apparent. ...

Same with what Matt said about the missing some commas, and their was also one place where it was awkward to read: "We sat there for what seemed like hours, ...

aparently not :D just post the one beofore this and maybe we can help.

Um....confused? I really don't see how this fits....

Ushur vs Jagged Edge

I would wonder what exactly that means.... What would you do if your parents said you could never listen to music, watch TV, watch movies and play video (computer) games ...

drawer

You sound stuck like Mesh said. WRITE MORE!

I really like this but I agree with Mesh and Jack, thoguh. And this sentence right here: "The girl, slightly annoyed, puts asider her needle and sampler." I think you ...