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XD No offense taken, Alice. I just looked at these again and I can't believe I posted them. Thanks for the bluntess though.

This poem was good! some points however: You still leave the cap off the toothpaste. Always. Squeezing from the top so that the tube mangles, Into a wasteful mess. We ...

I enjoyed this :D But, there was so much going on I had a hard time keeping up. First she's rowing, then she's a prostitute, then she's rowing, then she ...

This is exactly how I imagine a Prologue to be, the set-up for the story, the backround. It written very well for what it was. A few points however: King ...

I like it! but how could I not? everything you write is brilliant :wink: But a few things... William was eating lunch when he died. I don't know why but ...

I really liked this! it had beautiful rhythm and the rhymes were flawless. I do think you should break it up differently though. Maybe something like this: I hold in ...

Has anyone noticed that the fire has spread?

I see a good story brewing :D But, I had a really big problem with the whole piece. You TOLD us what was happening the entire time. You never SHOWED ...

Whenever I write a story (Novel, essay, anything) it always takes me more words than I had expected to end it. For example I sometimes realize along the way I ...

Thanks for the critiques! why is it in romantic fiction??? Tee hee :P you'll see.

I walk through curtains of darkness, pushing them aside with the beacon that is my iPod's LED light. While trying to focus on muffling my footsteps in the fluffy carpet ...

Don't you think we should be calling the fire department?

Hi! I love your name! I don't know why but it reminds me strawberries XD Welcome to the site, I hope you have a good time here! We're all pretty ...

Awww...Mr. Pepper Face...I wrote a story when I was little called "The Big Bad Bee" but yours sounds better XD Welcome! and yes I love caramel! bad caramel makes me ...

Nice article! It was short but it got to the point. The only problem is (Yes, I know It's an article but...) it seemed really bland, like really bland. At ...