hazellgreene

Oh wow...I love this!! First, I didn't notice any immediate spelling/grammar mistakes, so well done! And secondly, the concept is amazing, these wonderful dreams that turn against their maker! Your ...

Before you say anything...I know the ending needs refining - I'll be the first to admit it's abrupt! I had a letter addressed to me three months after Callum died. ...

This is my first time writing a sort of romancy story and this is only the introduction. Hope you like it!! Introduction He used to visit me every night. That ...

Ah lovely! Your use of language is remarkable and portrays brilliantly the spirit of the crow :) I especially love this bit! - Flooded rivers; bloated bodies, wade. Deception is ...

Ah, beautiful! I probably overuse that word, but I love your story. Like chloe13 has said, your story has an almost lyrical quality to it, which slips over the mind. ...

Wow, beautiful! You have some stunning images here and your use of language conveys emotions very well. I especially like this bit; a face of an angel, body of a ...

I'm afraid I'll have to disagree with you tanya98. even the stream spoke louder than he I'll agree, it would make more sense writing it differently, but this order of ...

This is a lovely little piece! I totally agree with what's being said above me, there are some beautiful images in there and I utterly know what it's like to ...

aw, this is beautiful! Like NightWriter, I agree, you have to watch your tenses, one or the other would make more sense! But other than that, your language is beautiful ...

hey there :) nice story :) I'm always intrigued by people who have these sort of twin-personalities. i'm doing psychology at school and it's something that has always interested me. ...

hi there! :) just wanted to say, wow, this is some seriously good writing here! The pace and flow of the writing is so lovely and so eye catching that ...

hey there! :) can i just say, i love the originality of your story! its very different to a lot of the stuff I've read and I love the main ...

Hey there :) I must say I found your story really interesting! Seeing the world through someone elses eyes (a stranger to the planet) really puts it in perspective, what ...

wow! your vocabulary is simply amazing - it paints such a vivid picture, I was totally hooked! I love your writing and though I agree a little with the people ...

Ellie often ran away from the children’s home. Her freedom was always short lived, but the sense of control and adrenalin always lasted. Besides, there was always the hope that ...