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Thank you everybody for your helpful suggestions ...... I will definitely incorporate them in my next chapter...

1. DISTURBED Adrianna Distant familiar memories flashed through my head sending emotions of both happiness and sadness, mostly sadness through me. Images of a newborn baby with distinct brown eyes ...

i liked the your style of writing but a little more insight into the characters' (Brett and Jasmine) will make the stor much better.... otherwise good work. keep it up!!

nice work.... it was amazing and enthralling .... keep it up !!!

nice job and as said by the others i loved the incorporation of the songs which are coincidently my favorite........ so keep up the good work !!!! :D