happybear

hmmm... your writing style can be 'bouncy' at times but you get your point across. This story really caught my attention you did good on that part! But you went ...

Sorry I had to stop all the sudden so it is short, but Im writing more Thank you so much for all your reviews so far

"1, 2, 3, and kick," A middle age lady called out from the front of the class as loud music blared from the speakers beside her. "Turn, turn, and stop." ...

personaly, and I hate to say this but your charecters always slip through my grasps. This being the beganing of your story you want to try to build charecters and ...

Congrats my dear friend!! You've done much better then me!!! I will say though that you did introduce Janet as Jane that confused me, you should fix it. You had ...

I dont really want to make too much of a plot becuase I really want people to create the story together. It won't be hard to make a love story, ...

Thanks! yes, Ralph is hopelessly in love with Sydney (If that's ok! Thank you so much!)

Alright here's how it goes: Follow rules. When we have 8 peeps we may start! (I really don't care if I start it or some one else) This story is ...

Is it too late to join? If it is please forgive me and ignore this post(Im new here) ____________________________________________________________________ Charecter: A young man who is despratly and he

Great stuff! You really drug me into it I felt like I was right there watching it happen! Though I do believe it was neccicary you did have what I ...

The rain came down in sheets racing across the meadow and disappearing over the horizon. In the middle of the tall and bowing grass a drenched and lonely figure walked ...

Great story! I wish it would never end! 8)