halogirl4197

haha nice! :)

i like it! :) its all true

you need to be more descriptive and its an okay murder scene =/ not to be mean but you can use a bit more improvement :) other then that you're ...

its pretty good, though I think you repeat your descriptive words WAY to much. I like how you described the woman though lol. You're pretty good :)

wow im impressed! when i read the first line i was sucked in :)

aww thats sweet! :)

Rating for language. Drained Chapt. 2 "Will, wake the hell up!" the rattling of the voice wakes me from my slumber as I nearly topple from my bed in shock. ...

I like it! :) if you lined it up like a poem it would've been perfect ^~^

Its okay =/ I liked your word structure however I think it would've been better if you hadn't rhymed other then that I like it :)

I'm kinda confused about the whole thing =/. It might be just me but I don't understand who they're writing too. At first, I thought they were like making a ...

Haha you're great a rhyming! :) but (even though I do kinda have bad vision) is there any way you can make your lives a bit shorter but it could ...

I like it! :) its very meaningful and dont worry when I write poetry I suck at rhyming too XD

Drained Chapt. 1 "The faded green trees were the first thing I noticed once I realized I was dreaming. However, at the time, my "dream" mind was obviously used to ...

I'm SO sorry you had to deal with that! Lol, I personally love rock and metal and that stuff but I would've never held my temper like you did XD. ...

Very good! :)