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Untouchable Chapt. 1 "The Clan ain't to happy with you, Jonathan," Cassandra murmured as her southern accent echoes through the room and she brushed her long, blond hair behind her ...

I like it! I usually write self-hating/suicidal (not that I am), sad poems too but none of mine compare to this! Great! :)

What is this talking about? I don't get the point of this whatsoever. Sorry =/.

Oh my gosh! I should have written a poem for mothers day XD all I gave my mom was a power point that was actually a class assignment. Was this ...

Wow....that's cool; did you do it on paint or actually draw it? But I don't wanna be a party pooper but this is a writing website lol....just to let you ...

VERY GOOD! I loved it! You should make a series of this! :)

At the beginning you were WAY to straight forward and it got confusing towards the middle when she was having her kid. I have no idea what was going on. ...

Drained Chapt. 4 My hand was trembling by the time I finished my whole three pages for last night's dream. I didn't want to go to school, I didn't want ...

Wow, nice :D

Hi! :) I came to review. First of all, the way you wrote the story kind of bored me a bit. However, the idea is good but also very well ...

Its pretty good however I think your a bit to straight forward =/ be more descriptive and you'd be AWESOMER!! :D

Drained Chapt. 3 In the distance, I hear Eric calling my name; at the tone of his voice, my heart sinks slowly into a deep hole I've had all my ...

It was okay.... You need to be more descriptive :) at first, I didn't understand what was going on or how he got his weird disorder on his face. I ...

you need to branch out more find more unusual words. Poetry isn't supposed to really make sense especially in a love poem :) keep practicing!

i like it :) short simple phrases with a good meaning! lol