halogirl4197

Wow lol. It's very good, not my type but I actually really liked it :D I didn't expect too.....I'm proud of you ^~^.

You need to be more descriptive :) don't be so straight forward in your poetry (unless you roll like that). I liked it, sorta, I usually don't prefer this type ...

Very nice! I really really liked it! :) I am jealous!!

Pretty good, though it's kind of straight forward of what' happening. That's just my opinion though but I might be jealous because it's so good! :)

Nice! I thought it was great, however, at the beginning I'm really confused about what it's talking about. How is she a liar? You used good description and word flow ...

Mirror Tell me your pain Talk to the mirror Move your lips And watch it respond Lift a hand To your face And touch the mask Of a murderer Fire ...

It was an okay story, didn't seem to have a central point to making it but hey, it's not mine :). I understand that it's a first person story but ...

This is sooooo good! I did also nearly cry and it was so romantic. Any girl would be lucky to have you and the girl you wrote this for must ...

It's very annoying that you repeat over and over that she was blind. If this was a poem, then sure, go ahead and repeat it but this a story. You've ...

I love the idea! And I can tell you learned a good bit from history class XD all I can say is don't be so straight forward in the beging. ...

Eternal Cold Without a body, Your soul runs free, Away from physical pain, But alone in society, Eternally cold in the mind, Sick with the pain of dying, Slaughtering souls, ...

I hate to judge this story since I'm very religious but it's very un-descriptive and kind of boring. You're jumping from scene to scene and it's kind of confusing. It's ...

This is kind of confusing, but maybe that's just. At first, I didn't even know if the narrator was a boy or girl. I thought it was talking about a ...

This is exactly how it feels like to have a broken heart. It like literally hurts....good job.... :)

I like it :)