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I thought it was pretty good but is there a certain thing it's talking about? At first I thought it was love but now I don't think so. Overall, it ...

Are your chapters going to get longer? I think you could've put a bit of chapt. 3 in this because it's quite short :). Also, you got some mistakes as ...

I really liked it! :D You're a great poet, my friend. :D I LOVE YA!

I'm pretty confused. I liked it, I really did :). But is Michael her ex-husband? It doesn't mention his name at all in the first part so how did he ...

In many movies or books you come to find that when you slowly wake from, I don’t know, a close encounter to a concussion? You usually find yourself to wake ...

Interesting description. I actually kinda of liked it. You're pretty good, impressive!

Great job! I really really liked this!!

I liked it :). The idea should have been made a story! I didn't really get it though, this short section I mean. I read the spoiler after I read ...

This seems more like a song than a poem. It repeats a lot and in many poems it can work but this poem is to short for repeats :). I ...

Not As They Seem A lot of strange things have happened to me in my life. On a daily basis, to be exact. Things that do not happen to normal ...

I''m kind of confused... I really don't know what's going on and I reread it a few times. I'm guessing this isn't a normal type of story, will you make ...

This is great! :) But I'd suggest lining the sentences out, ya know, to make it more flowy :D. Lol, it would be neat and gorgeous! You're very good :)

Fall Apart To keep together I do not cry Tears are my glue And I must stay dry And I’m a doll Ragged and old Struggling through My dark secrets ...

I love how your story starts out! But to much info at once!! It's annoying! :P Other than that, try and be more descriptive :) you can describe all this ...

She was a southern girl and that's why it was hard to read XD also I don't know if there's anything else that needs to be fixed, I think it's ...