halfmetal

Thanks for your help! I've written this chapter over and over again, so I forget that not everyone can visualize it exactly like I can. I have more descriptions that ...

Thanks! I can't believe I forgot to do the paragraphs! I feel bad now. I guess I forgot to proofread. I'll fix that, and maybe put the bank burning back ...

Thanks a lot! I really like your idea! I'm already most of the way through chapter two, so maybe I can push everything up a bit, and get rid of ...

Thanks for your reply. I really appreciate it. I have revised the beginning of the story a bit since this was uploaded. I will describe his appearance in the mirror. ...

Thanks so much, Tucker! You're right, I do have a problem with sentence variety. I hadn't noticed it, until you pointed it out to me. I'll do some exercises to ...

Thanks so much for your response! Now I'm really motivated. Actually, my main character is a boy. His name is Sara for a reason. I will put that into the ...