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;) its okay! i was going for the whole asshole thing. I don't like him either but the stripper he falls in love with is supposed to balance him out ...

Phorcys: sorry you didn't like it no, i really do write poetry, but i just did this one really quick. this one is about a relationship, but i just didn't ...

I never really got the whole "critiquing writers" thing because, well, isn't it what the words mean that count, not the grammar? Anyways, your poem moved me! There were a ...

theres ink in my blood and my heart doesnt know my minds full of thoughts since a long time ago my keyboard is bloody my fingers are scarred my brain ...

I worship this story.

I love your story. The last line was the BEST :] All I have to say is work on puncuation, and I agree with Wooster. Do you remember full dialogue ...

I'm always too late for corrections. This story is really well-written! I feel like I'm this girl, freaking about stupid hair (like most girls do). But, one question. What's a ...

Prologue. I'm a Star Wars-loving, Harry Potter-reading, robot-building, nerd. The typical nerd. Hardly any friends. No girl friends. No love interests. That's me. I'm the guy you copy off of ...

Well, I won't really say anything anyone else hasn't already said.... But yeah, I thought this story was funny and cute. I liked how the narrator was over dramatic about ...

LOL no its fine! This is not the original, actually. My friend and I are doing a co-story thing and I don't want to post what she writes on here, ...

I woke up to the sound of laughing, and a blender. I walked downstairs, and there was my moms assistant, Charlie. He didn't see me when he walked into the ...

Hello. First off, I just wanted to say that I love this story! I like the way the narrartor interacts with the audience. I love the main character. I see ...

thank you! I will definately work on her personality more :]

Wow, as the other two said. Too many characters at once! Try intoducing one chacter, have a scene with them, then intoduce the other in another scene. Otherwise, it looks ...

That was entertaining. I hope to read more of your work!