gymnast_789

Just thought I'd say welcome back! I know how it feels being too busy and not being able to write.

I love photography too, I remember when I got my camera I went crazy! As for sport I love to play a lot of them: football, soccor, volleyball, **gymnastics**, and ...

I've been one here for a while so I better tell a little about myself...okay here we go. My real name is Amanda, and I live in Montana. As you ...

tat knew me, tat = that? My love has red hair, with blue eyes as well. She smiles at me and she does it so well. I like how you ...

Retreat! Retreat! Gun fire, that's all there was to hear was we were running for our lives. I think that you should put the beginning of this in quotations like ...

The bus lurched down the street. Try adding a little more detail to this sentence. Otherwise I really liked this. I could make a lot of connections to this, having ...

I agree that playdough is too silly a word fot the style of writing you have chosen. Even just switching it to clay would, in my opinion, add a lot ...

From when last time when I read this it has gotten much better. With the sentences being space out it was easier for me to read, and I actually understood ...

This is only the beginning of the second chapter. I'll be adding more later. December 2004

Thanks for all your help!

"A.J . hurry up and get in the car! We are going to get caught." Amber shouts from inside the car. "Soooo who cares I'm having tons of fun" A.J ...

I was really tired when I did this so a few things might sound a little funny: Sersemon finally looked up from the cremation fire. "How did my father die?" ...

I thought that this as really good. But I agree with Phorcys. Slow things down when they meet the seven wizards. Otherwise, I thought it was written well.

This is continuing from Prologue: The Golden Egg Chapter 1 :The News

Very interesting. I enjoyed reading this piece. The only problem I have is to maybe put more discription into your characters. Otherwise the punctuation and capitalization were really good. I ...