gymnast_789

Welcome! I hope you enjoy your stay here. I love to read too! Mostly fiction but I also enjoy historical fiction! If you have any questions or need a critique ...

I agree that the wings look too small. I really like the background! Good job on drawing the dragon and the boy. I really like this!

These are cool! I like the 1st and 2nd.

Chapter 1 I was so bored , my mum Had given me yet another lecture which I of course did not listen to And I had yet more maths homework. ...

You should make two sentences out of all of these: When Nasaru woke up by the light shining in his room he left it and went to the eating area. ...

Thanks ANI!

I think your description could use a little work. Its not that you don't describe the people good enough its just that you need to blend them in with you ...

I agree with everything Ofour said. Maybe change "deader" to "more dead"

Hey blonde&confused! I like your user name :D Welcome to YMS! If you have any questions or need a critique, PM me. I hope you enjoy your stay here!

Hey zenonian! Welcom to YMS! I hope you enjoy you stay here. If you have any questions just ask me!

When AJ could no longer hear the music and all of the noise she stopped to look around her. To really see the area she was always in but there ...

drinking chocolate coffee creamers straight. haha me and my friends do this a lot too. This was really well written. I really liked it. Good descriptions

These are really good.I love the cat! I also like the 8th one.

Reminds me of where I live, I really like the 4th one.

As they passed, some of the villagers waved. Others didn’t notice. Instead of making these two different sentences try adding them together and putting a comma where the period is. ...