gymbum21

I agree too many "The"'s but its still good... I like how its normal feelings that almost everyone can relate to too...

hey thanx for the critques.. and i completely agree like i said it is my friends.. but i never liked it a whole lot i thought the whole idea was ...

What do I do when you say you don't care? And the pain is far too deep for me to bear. I wonder will you even notice I am gone? ...

Is it possible to p u l l The velvet fabric around This fragile surface of Your frail body, and p o u r Out the aches and trembles onto ...

Hello...lol. Sorry, jus thought it would be fun to be like... Hellloooo. But i didnt think you'd appreciate that. :? First I'd like to say, Not all poems have to ...

I think it's an amazing poem. I think the punctuation and all look good now, but i never read the poem without them either. I also think that you've hit ...

Thats a really nice poem and I agree with the colons. It would be right to add them in. `There is a feel to the poem which is hard to ...