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the story line was exellent the only thing i can find wrong was the numerous typos and you could explain the back round a little more, write on :D

THE TIME IS NOW I started walking back with him. In about 2 minutes we were back at the tower I was staying in. “I’ll see you tomorrow,” he started ...

the story was good and it had a alice in wonderland feel and the only thing was the story was a little hard to follow so can you clear it ...

the story is definatly a good sequal i think you could make a little longer :idea: and i think this is basicly is a great story :)

dude that story was awesome the only thing i could find wrong with it was that you could describe the teens a little more WRITE A SECOND PART!!! :roll: :D

the story is good and i wish that you would talk more about Ahtos and i hope you make it longer :arrow: :wink:

there is no other way to say it the story was geinus, the only way i think you could improve it is give a little more backround information, but please ...

Lost Hope (Continued from Armageddon) I gazed at the lake and couldn’t believe my eyes that a place like this could be on Earth. I took a look around and ...

this story definatly caught my intrest and i hope you will continue and to improve it tell more about where the story is taking place

i think the story was a little to short and i wish you could've given more backround information because i didn't understand what was going on. i hope you continue ...

the story defiatly scared me strait i definatly wouldn't want to read this at night, but if you described the man a little more it would be even scareier

i think you should talk more about the dog because i didn't get a picture in my head, so could you expand on that? other than that the story was ...

the story was great, but i would like to see more detail of what the con man did.

THE ARMEGEDON please citique so i know if i should continue the series- thank you Everyone knows at birth that destiny is their guide. Everyone has a path that they ...