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Re: Hidden Illusions Chapter 4
This was a bit better; I liked the description of the singing. The tree-house was good too. I started to feel a bit more interest in the character. THe speech ...
Nov 6, 2011 -
Re: My Greatest Gift from God
This was quite touching. I thought it was rather good. The rhyming could definitely do with some work; I didn't like the way some verses didn't rhyme at all and ...
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: Ega and the life of Raider Ch1 the lost dreams and pain
Hi aquatica. I agree with the others. You need to add some paragraphing and sort out the punctuation, and the tenses. The title really confused me, just as an example. ...
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: Ega and the life of Raider Ch1 the lost dreams and pain
Hi aquatica. I agree with the others. You need to add some paragraphing and sort out the punctuation, and the tenses. The title really confused me, just as an example. ...
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: A Risk Worth Taking
I was quite pleased to find I had reviews. Now, well, hmm... That's certainly not an overly pleasant way to start a review is it, BlueAfrica? I appreciate that you ...
Sep 23, 2011