guineapiggirl

This is interesting. I didn't find it a very skilled piece of work. I found it strange that the father was obviously religious but used a rude word and at ...

This was a bit better; I liked the description of the singing. The tree-house was good too. I started to feel a bit more interest in the character. THe speech ...

I'm sorry but this really bored me. There just wasn't anything going on at all, for any of it. Something I noticed that was bad: His eyes grazed over her. ...

Wow... Wow... I didn't get it for most of the story. At first I just thought she was violent, but then with the sudden use of that word, that blunt ...

A winter’s moon shone down on the forest, hiding those who wished to be hidden and lighting up the clearings; illuminating the gnomes as they danced merrily. Three dwarves moved ...

A winter’s moon shone down on the forest, hiding those who wished to be hidden and lighting up the clearings; illuminating the gnomes as they danced merrily. Three dwarves moved ...

Hi. I liked this! Just a few bits and bobs where I'd have worded it differently Verse one: I was once in a dream; Where no one said good bye ...

This was quite touching. I thought it was rather good. The rhyming could definitely do with some work; I didn't like the way some verses didn't rhyme at all and ...

This was quite touching. I thought it was rather good. The rhyming could definitely do with some work; I didn't like the way some verses didn't rhyme at all and ...

Hi aquatica. I agree with the others. You need to add some paragraphing and sort out the punctuation, and the tenses. The title really confused me, just as an example. ...

Hi aquatica. I agree with the others. You need to add some paragraphing and sort out the punctuation, and the tenses. The title really confused me, just as an example. ...

Hi aquatica. I agree with the others. You need to add some paragraphing and sort out the punctuation, and the tenses. The title really confused me, just as an example. ...

Hmm... OK. So he just goes and kills himself. That's not very plausible. This story made me feel sick with contempt. I seriously hated it. And that's not just because ...

I was quite pleased to find I had reviews. Now, well, hmm... That's certainly not an overly pleasant way to start a review is it, BlueAfrica? I appreciate that you ...

A Risk Worth Taking She hid in the shadows of the hut, watching the guards patrol out of sunken, sleep-deprived eyes. Her head was shaved and she was naked; her ...