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Nice work, just one thing I noticed wrong with this. The rhythm in the fourth and fifth stanzas don't really match the flow of the rest of the poem. I ...

Very Shakespearean, you should do more of this. This suits you well. Not much to critique, just thought I'd give you my thoughts.

She hates me. She always has. I guess I should have known. I guess everybody was right. I was just too stubborn to see her for who she really was. ...

It's been almost a whole year since it happened. I've almost completely forgotten. Now, a new problem has presented itself. Forgetting a past mistake is easier than one allows it ...

Now, this is getting interesting. Very twisted and cryptic, kind of disturbing. Love it! Only obvious problems is the mispellings and other little mistakes, but that's irrelivant at this point. ...

Wow, where to begin. Well, it certainly is getting interesting. The love triangle is definately there like I had predicted. But, it was...well, long. Not that there is anything wrong ...

New characters, now I'm very intrigued. Sounds like there are about to be a lot of twists in this. Well, I'll say I don't really have much to critique, other ...

Well, not bad. But, there are a few spelling mistakes and missing little words in between sentences. It was a good second chapter. Also, just as a suggestion. I found ...

Well, chapter 1 was fun to read. Entertaining, interesting, and a tad insane. Also, there were a lot of missing little words and spelling mistakes, but this isn't an english ...

Other than forgetting to add in a few little words, such as: like, as, and the, I really have nothing else to critique about this. I found this to be ...

I liked this. It was funny. Short and ironic. Very to the point, but yet it made me wanted to see more. You should do something like this again, with ...

this piece was very beautifully written. Wouldn't change a thing.

Okay, I didn't mean to get all spiritual. I read what you wrote and I must have made the mistake of taking it at face value. I'll remember not to ...

Yeah, this is pretty melodramatic, but it was beautifully written. I'm glad you decided to post this after all. I think the title for this was very appropriate. This seems ...

Nice poem, it's a simple message that has a powerful impact. I think every christian can relate to this. I liked the short stanzas. You said so much without having ...