greenjay

Well, looks like I've been beat to it :D. I read Jack's article as well, and it was very helpful. I do have a few suggestions I might point out ...

#2 :D

I'm probably just repeating what everyone else said but...ahem. Anyway, I started a novel where I had most everything planned out in most every detail. Um...I got so bored I ...

Not bad. The one thing that I noticed were the lines on the ground. They are fine to show hills and bumps and such, but you continued them across the ...

Sweet! That's all I have to say :P -greenie

Can't see much (you're probably tired of hearing that by now :P) but what I can see is really good! You should draw a pic of Brad. -GJ