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I couldn't descide which one I liked better so I put them both. Any preferences? My heart is craving something more, what this world offers does not satisfy, it seems ...

Bowing his head respectfully, Dominic came forward, ncareful not to meet the king's eyes. careful, not ncareful. Just a typo that i thought I'd mention. Anyway good job and please ...

The griffon, half-bird, half-lion mythical creature shakily stood and tested its thin, brown legs and its feline, powerful legs, in its back. The griffon (half-bird, half-lion) shakily stood and teste

Cool! I don't have too much to say...you should probably legthen (give more detail and explaination) the part with the shadow Guardian and the girl. Both parts seemed rushed. The ...

Paperback is good, but hardback lasts forever and gives you the felling of holding something nice and important!

Things are coming a long! Brad was left and he and Whiperba have met (I knew it would happen). And you might as well kill me, because I have no ...

Hey, thanks. I aggree that there is not much of a story line at all. I wrote this a while back just to try something different. I don't think I'll ...

Ooooo! Interesting. Please write more. -Me

Simple and interesting. Please write more.

The night was cold and I pulled my ragged coat close to me. The barely visible trees rose around me like impassible giants wanting to pull me into their depths. ...

YES!!!!!!!!!!!!! They left Brad and are going to do the king's bidding. Money over Emotions. IT'S PERFECT!!! :D :D :D Okay, Brad should do something heroic and cool now (like ...

Sweet! Goodjob again. Okay to corrections: He was about eighteen thousand arms lengths up when the tree looped around into a knot and shot out into several different branches. Eighteen ...

:D Two thumbs up on this one! Very good. I'm liking Dominic more and more, I like how you are developing his character. Also Whiperba has got to be one ...

All I can say is cool and interesting! Write more! The End

Good! I definitely like this better. One thing The three simultaneously bent their legs, opened their wings and launched themselves into the air, spiraling upwards and forwards in perfect unison, ...