greenjay

So, here's my dillema...How long should my chapters be? (I write fantasy by the way.) Some people perfer shorter, some longer, some medium length. Which ever way you like just ...

I'm probably just repeating what everyone else said but...ahem. Anyway, I started a novel where I had most everything planned out in most every detail. Um...I got so bored I ...

I wondered why you hadn't posted in a while. Anyway, welcome back. I didn't find any grammatical errors or anything, but I did find one thing kind of strange. The ...

I'm first :twisted: hehe! Do I get a prize :P. Okay fine, I'll shutup and critique. *Ahem* Ahh...the grammatical errors are...none. I didn't find any grammatical or spelling errors and ...

Let's see, more detail...hmm. Like I said before, I really liked how Khor whooped the teacher in front of everyone when they were scared of the teacher. Everyone was all ...

Is Tas dead? I hope not, we'll need him soon. Oh, and he might want to escape soon as well. Mathias "I think I might have a place for you," ...

Mysteries Unraveled? FINALLY :D:D:D:D:D!!! He looked at his long black hair ; he let it hang in his eyes, looking at himself sadly. Add the bold ; thingymagig. Khor barely ...

Mathias "You did not seem to hear me," I said menacingly, glaring at her with my piercing eyes. "Who are you and why are you here? You are a native...for ...

Tyrin I walked up to Seeker slowly, gazing at him critically. "What's your game griffin?" I asked quietly. He turned and looked at me strangely. "What do you mean?" "What ...

Aww! How sweet. Anywho good job...and don't worry, you don't HAVE to start with action. This is still interesting enough as is. -The Jay of Green

Mathias My hand was at her throat before she could stir. I was not magical, beside my gift of turning into a hawk, but I was a fighter, and did ...

Waa? That's long. Well, I'll try not to fall asleep :P, here I go... The man wearing red stepped out of the one who was carrying Khor. I don't get ...

I don't really get this all, but maybe that's just me, and maybe you'll explain more later. Anyway, it was very good and once again I didn't find anything wrong ...

Okay, now I critique :D. The holds are gathering in three day’s time," Ianna said eventually, striking for her room, a small cave just off the foremost mouth— so that ...

I want to critique this but I just have one quick question. Where's chapter 2? -Ahh, Me