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MEMORY LANE… Bang. Tom, the new assistant, was noisily shuffling around with God-knows-what outside of the small office room, while Shaun’s concentration was shattered into a million thought-parti

Chapter 5: The end of the beginning Last night was the best time of my life. I have officially dating Brittney for three months now. Who is the most beautiful ...

Sorry that I havent read your prologue and anything I post here has already been fixed but here we go anyway:) As I stood there, I saw the animal come ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! I think your dialog was meh. Way too many run-ons. Almost sounded like William Shatner. Do you have the entire chapter? I think this part would ...

I enjoyed this reading. My favorite line was this: Well, okay, maybe pushing Kenna Rogers off the slide in sixth grade wasn't very nice. But I'd had a justifiable reason! ...

Short but enjoyable. I think you used "as" too many times in this prologue. I ran. I ran as far and as fast as I could. As I ran, I ...

Well thank you for the introduction Eli, I've read the novel you wrote and I thought it was very well written. For anyone interested in reading my first chapter (I ...

Very well written and i enjoyed reading it, not too many mistakes i saw. I whispered comforting words to her. She tried to stand but I held her down with ...

I enjoyed reading this but i think it moved too fast. Like maybe some more dialog or even describing more of the fight instead of her gaining the upper paw. ...

Thank you so much for the review :D . If there is a novel you wrote that needs some reviews. I'll review it for you just PM me. What was ...

But enough of riddles. My father was Icarus. Yes, the boy who flew to his death. That's the myth. The truth is that he and my grand-father lived in Crete ...

It really caught my attention and I am wondering where it might lead. I can't wait to read chapter 1! What is your chapters name? is it Bigger meanings? I ...

Consumed in shadow the creature of Mordeth stood before the High King of Men, draped in darkness,(period) a black crown sitting upon it's head, it lifted it's dark blade and ...

Chapter 4: Back by popular demand: Shaun Grey “Shaun my boy, it’s good to see you again.” Roy Schnides said from across the bar. The man had a bit of ...

Chapter 3: The spins and turns Now, back in my office; were things are back to normal. Check this, write this copy that. The usual. “Have you finished the report ...