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Re: Best TV shows?
Firefly.
Sep 9, 2012 -
Re: What's the most beautiful word? Thoughts?
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Sep 9, 2012 -
Re: Browsing Literary Works: Thoughts?
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May 28, 2012 -
Re: The Passionate Murderer
I really like how you narrate this. And the tale is lovely, in that woeful way. However, I don't understand why in some stanzas, you rhyme yet in others you ...
Jan 10, 2012 -
Re: Toastie.
Hawk- I see what you mean by referring more about the paranormal's hunger and weakness instead of her fearsomeness. I guess it does weaken how the paranormal is perceived. Lavvie- ...
Jan 10, 2012 -
Re: Circles and Squares
First of all, I really liked the metaphor of the shapes. The first stanza started off great. It has a nice flow and the imagery was amazing. I can imagine ...
Jan 9, 2012 -
Re: Toastie.
The night was still. Nobody would have noticed if someone froze time. The only thing that signalled life was still alive was the swish swash of trees. They were silhouettes ...
Jan 9, 2012 -
Re: Blue Mask
Would the first stanza be better off if 'They bring a slight wonder / To his homely face' were one line? Then it could match the lengths of the majority ...
Jan 8, 2012 -
Re: Broken Love
I agree with Kitty15 about the title of the poem. I wonder how many other poems are titled 'Broken Love'. It is quite unoriginal and bland. Anyway, I like the ...
Jan 8, 2012 -
Re: Whilst You Can
I don't find that this poem flows very well. I couldn't find a beat to go with the poem as I read. But then again, I might be biased because ...
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Dec 29, 2011