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Re: Things Left Unsaid
Hello! This was really well written and it was hard to stop reading. I love how your characters come alive. If you write more I'd love to read it.
May 26, 2008 -
Re: x
HI! I don't care what anybody says, I wouldn't change a THING about your descriptions. You write beautifully! And as far as her 'sadness' goes I really don't think it's ...
May 26, 2008 -
Re: West of Forgetfulness River
Hello! Sorry for taking so long to reply. I read your story again and I did notice much improvement. Nice job. :) There are still a few areas (near the ...
May 26, 2008 -
Re: `
Very cooolll!!! Having read your other chapters it seems like this is a very fast paced book (which is perfectly fine), but I keep wanting to know what's going on. ...
Apr 19, 2008 -
Re: West of Forgetfulness River
I don't want to get too deep into critiqueing this so I only have a few things to say. Mainly you need to work on your tenses because they are ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: Soccertime love
HI. Here is my honest critique...not trying to be rude or anything so if I come off that way sorry, just trying to be honest and helpful. This was really ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: Cerra
This is a story I've been kinda working on off and on again. This isn't the beginning, this is actually a few pages into it, but I didn't really want ...
Apr 7, 2008 -
Re: Evil Angel- Chapter One
Hello!!! I almost didn't read this because it was so long, but I started reading it anyway and got really into it. I really like your writing style and your ...
Apr 7, 2008 -
Re: ^>
Hello!! I've read Cursed: Chapter One, but I'm a little confused about how this ties in (although I have my suspicions). Is this just another character viewpoint that is going ...
Apr 4, 2008 -
Re: Embracing the Moon
Ok first I have to admit I haven't really been wanting to come to this sight much lately and whenever I see in my email that someone has replied to ...
Mar 24, 2008 -
Re: Him
This is really good. You do a good job of emotionally impacting the reader (at least for me you did). I personally liked the beginning and the middle of the ...
Mar 23, 2008 -
Re: "Screaming out loud."
I don't have anything to say on punctuation because frankly, I'm probably not good at punctuation myself. I think the important thing is to have something that speaks to the ...
Mar 9, 2008 -
Re: Untitled
That first night, I took a risk. I went to that place, warily, seeking, not knowing what I'd find. But you found me. What could I do? Hide? I did. ...
Mar 9, 2008 -
Re: Embracing the Moon
[pre]Prologue When I awoke on the shore everything was dark. I was cold and uncomfortable. I could feel the sand clinging to my water soaked clothing. I remembered to breathe ...
Mar 8, 2008 -
Re: Why I'm considered a psycho... (Chapter Two)
This is definitely entertaining! I feel so confused though. Maybe you could explain a little earlier on what exactly is going on with this girl. All I understand is that ...
Mar 8, 2008
