geekyamna

Hiya :) I enjoyed reading this, it was well written and i can imagine your characters easily. Only think you may want to describe more is the setting. I get ...

Thanks, should have probably mentioned there are some grammer/spelling mistakes since its a first draft!

Need some harsh critique on this chapter. Please ignore grammer/spelling mistakes since its a first draft! Does it have enough hook, a good MC voice and good pace It seemed ...

This is very well written and I do find myself wanting to read more. You have a good storyline- very gripping. Only nitpick is probably to make some of your ...

I think your MC has a very good voice so well done. The dialogue start caught my attention straight away, but near the end I actually didn't like your MC. ...

I'm not a real big fan of the prologue, the first few paragraphs were difficult to read because of your sentence structure. There are times when your sentences drag on ...