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Re: A Mountain of Hunger
First off, let me say how amazing this is. It's full of raw emotion and it is just indescribably good. The two minor things I can point out are capitalizing ...
Feb 4, 2011 -
Re: Losing You
Pretty much everyone else already posted the things I saw. The only other thing I can think of is that I thought the word "eyes" was a little repeatitive. Maybe ...
Feb 4, 2011 -
Re: You Know You're a Nerd When...
You know you're a nerd when you are always correcting everyone you know.
Feb 3, 2011 -
Re: Not Being Carried Away with Descriptions
Thanks for the help. I'll defiantly use this for the novel I'm writing. -Hope
Feb 2, 2011 -
Re: :D I'm new
Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy it here. Tell us a little about yourself. What do you like to write? Favorite book and color? Any works about to be ...
Feb 1, 2011 -
Re: Hi! I'm New and would love to get started!
Hi and welcome! I joined two days ago so maybe we can chat or something. PM me if you want to talk. Anyway, I read part of your novel and ...
Jan 31, 2011 -
Re: Three women and a blank page
I really enjoyed this poem. I love how you repeated the last line in each stanza (blank eyes, blank page). I loved how you described the sister's eyes and what ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: When I Play The Piano
All I can say after reading this is wow. I play the piano too so I can relate to this poem in a way. Also, you described this really well ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Actors (scenes 1-10)
I agree with jetpack. The script is very well written, but I think you should cut out some of the narration scenes. This is very good though and i like ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Hello
Thanks for the reply. Um let me see. Favorite Book: Pride and Prejudice, Harry Potter, and Hunger Games. Ice Cream: Vanilla (but I prefer mint chocolate chip) Right Footed (left ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Peer Pressure
I really like this. You described the characters and the scenes very well. I just saw a couple minor things though that I thought I should point out. I couldn't ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Hello
Hi everyone! My name is Hope and I am an aspiring writer. Few of my peers share this dream of mine, so I joined this website to post work, review ...
Jan 29, 2011
