gamechanger10

wow...this is probably the first thing i've written in three days--aside from IMs with people. i know some of you are all: "I've had writers block for two months!" but ...

alright, so you didn't have to point out the fact that it wasn't supposed to rhyme... that part was pretty obvious. now for the actual poem... this didn't really do ...

this was a pretty good poem... umm...your third and fourth lines are the only ones that don't rhyme... maybe you tried that, i don't know its your little poem thing, ...

pretty good...really good actually...well, until the end. the last line--for me--was sort of...i don't know how to describe it...just strange... it was kind of like, well, yeah...of course...you know.

most of the advice and stuff (sorry mrs. kelly, i said a vague word...and sorry mrs. harms, i think i spelled vague wrong) the i could give you has already ...

this was a great beginning. it left some of it open and at the same time clearly stated the problem from several different perspectives. i agree with some of the ...

billy already covered most of the grammar and spelling issues, etc. one this that REALLY bothered me was the fact that you used the Canaby Sisters WAY too much. it ...

alright, so my last two poems haven't been very great. so, i have two strikes (in my mind, anyway). this is my last try at poetry...three strikes and I'm lets ...

the house moves under your feet. groaning,swaying flowing to the beat the stairs you enter take you below where the ordinary man would not go. the objects change, but the ...

alright, so, i'm planning on posting all of this book chapter-by-chapter at some point, however a certain person (hobbes) has been bugging me to post the ending so he can ...

well, this story or part of a story or--whatever--branched off from what i thought was the main topic... i'm not sure what you were trying to do with this... you ...

ok, i didn't know if this should be in lyric poetry or not... anyhow, I'm sorry if you disagree with me, but i just HATE fireworks... i thought of this ...

ok, so, despite my involvement in the creation (ha. not really. the last couple lines), this poem was pretty good...but just pretty good. the rhymes fit, but you lose the ...

well, S.L., thanks for at least reading my post, but--to be honest--that didn't really help me much at all...

ok, i know the paragraphs look small on here, but i was judging by the wide-ruled notebook paper that i first wrote it on... :D