gamechanger10

well, the two reviews before me pretty much covered everything. just listen to them and it'll make the piece even better! this is a great children's poem! keep up the ...

this was eerily dark, but still captivating! bravo! -GC10

this was wonderful! theres nothing else i have to say... great job! -GC10

here it goes... ---------------------------------- I stared blankly down the shrub-covered hill. A few hundred yards away, a fire danced. I wasn’t sure whose it was, or what was burning, but ...

i pretty much agree with everyone else on pretty much everything... especially the whole 'dying while writing this rhyme' thing. that sort of set me off. i'd change it entirely.. ...

well, everybody basically covered everything i was thinking... so just listen to all of them. anyhow, LOVED IT! can't wait to read more!!! keep writing! -GC10

oh...okay...yeah....i had no idea what you were talking about before. i get it now...suddenly, i think the piece is better... -GC10

i agree with wisemann210..um...three... just listen to him and you'll be fine. this was a great, abstract way of looking at everything.... great work! -GC10

this is kind of creepy, but, hey, thats okay, i'm used to creepy stuff... jk. this was as samsal said, sad... but dont think it needs to be longer. it ...

umm...gross... no, this was really good... i'd say i really enjoyed it, but that might come across as a little creepy... i might just be a sick person, but i ...

i agree 100 percent with andim...something something... certain lines really stuck out and were perfectly written, while others were only okay. i didn't actually recognize the take off of the ...

first, you need to review two other posts quick...you're supposed to do that before posting one of your own...if a mod catches you you'll have to review four....i'd suggest doing ...

I wasn’t borne in the city; I drew my first breath in what is now the scorched groove, i think you mean grove but what was then the most beautiful ...

first, chocoholic, he said that at the end of the day he was as happy and smiling as the sun he drew in art class, not that he was happy ...

this was a very good piece. well crafted and perfectly descriptive... i agree with ihighton that your paragraphs were a bit long...that could really bother certain people, it didnt bother ...