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This is an excerpt from my NaNo, Darkness. On Christmas Eve, I smoked an entire pack of cigarettes and drank myself unconscious. It didn’t necessarily make me feel better. There ...

I chose "very disappointed." But by that, I meant I'd die.

Well, this had a good intention, I'm sure. However, the song was sort of lacking in emotion. That is just how I, as a reader, felt, and to you, this ...

Alright, well, this is a very bitter song. It's verging on cranky-old-man bitter at certain points. The intention/viewpoint in this piece is rather scattered and unclear. It seems to switch ...

Alright, so, this was alright. (

Okay, so, this was a good poem. Good. If good is what you're aiming for, congratulations, but I think you're trying to go beyond. The gradual decrease in both strength ...

Alright, so I think it's been said that it is a bit difficult to read quite enough times. I, however, had no problems with reading through this and understanding it ...

Oh, um, in the eighth stanza, the word "they" is not referring to the bars, but to people. Thanks so much for the review.

Tears prick my eyes, Pain crushes my heart. I can't live on like this, With you so far apart. The night that you left me, Was the night that I ...

I didn't enter, but thanks for the suggestion. It means a lot.

Thanks, Mary. And...um. Thanks, Asha. Nice...enthusiasm?

Oh, my. Yes, well...I suppose I should post here some time or another. I am the friend that Hobbes mentioned at the very beginning and I guess, then, I'm the ...

Hey, Jocelyn here. If you have time, I'd love a review on both chapters I have posted of my NaNo, Darkness. Chapter 1: And Chapter 2: Thanks!

Everyone I know just makes fun of swine flu.

Chapter 2 High school. Land of the free. Home of the brave. My own personal Hell. Whatever you want to call it, it’s not fun. You can call prison a ...