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The names are made up by Sami, and the Indiana Jones is a machine that shoots out arrows from the wall when you step on a pressure point, which is ...

Thank you! This was just kind of a random idea that popped into my head, so I wrote out a prologue... I'm not entirely sure where this is going yet, ...

Hi! Regan here! I'm going to review your post. I put things that are wrong in red, there corrections in green, things i like in blue and punctuation/words that should ...

The story is about a girl who lives a normal life in a city that is on what used to be New York. She was kidnapped one day and woke ...

Please comment! Needs reviews badd

Hi! I'm Regan, your reviewer for this story. I put things I like in blue, things you shoulod change in red, and their corrections in green. This story was taken ...

Hi! I'm Regan, your reviewer for this story. I put things I like in blue, things you shoulod change in red, and their corrections in green. This story was taken ...

Oh hahaha my bad! Typo... lol

“Jack,” The boy said sticking his hand out. He had finally stood from his spot on the sidewalk where he sat alone. Most children had dozed off to sleep on ...

thanks! She was dreaming, but her dream took what had really happened and replayed it... I guess... Idk how to explain it lol but she was really dreaming,

hmmm... I thought I did an okay job describing the senses, I dont have taste or smell, but sight feeling and hearing are pretty much covered in there! As for ...

Hi! I'm Regan, your reviewer for this peice. The way I do this is I highlight the thing that is wrong or needs editing in RED and the correction/what it ...

Hi! I'm Regan, your reviewer for this peice. The way I do this is I highlight the thing that is wrong or needs editing in RED and the correction/what it ...

Thanks! I try to remember to write it Arial every time, but its hard to remember hahaha I'll go through and fix that!

Prologue: Arial looked out her window which covered the entire wall. Pride was swelling within her, the kind of pride, she assumed, a mother would feel watching her child grow ...