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Hii! and welcome to YWS! As for your story, I was thouroughly interested from the time I read the first line. I do not have much to say. All the ...

Thanks Sudz!!! I took up your idea of getting selena to spoil the dance. I mentioned her at the end! And yeah, I hadn't named the m.c yet! lol! But ...

Chapter 3...The end of middle school As she stepped gracefully into the hall, which was decorated with balloons and streamers of every possible colour, all heads turned. It was as ...

Hii Alexis!!! Great piece of work... Just a bit too quick...Things need to be described better. Its like, one minute they meet...the next, they are in love. Describe the feelings, ...

Oh my gosh! This was great... It had such a nice meaning. At first, I was a bit confused, but then I got it.. A very good read, I must ...

It was good! but a bit too short, I'll say.. It keeps the reader waiting. What happens after she chooses a glass?? We want to know more! But all in ...

Sorry, but this poem seems very very forced!! It wasn't that bad, but you reall really have to work on you rythm. Some lines were good, though, like this one. ...

Hii there!! I do not have much toay here. I liked your story...a lot! It took an unexpected twist and I love twists! I'd just like to point out one ...

Thanks Chirantha!!! Thanks SUdzz!!! I have made the changes and I will keep in mind wat Sudz told me!Q!! Thanks a lot once again!

Thanks a lot Chirantha!! I made the changes you told me too....

Umm....Well, I am bad at title's too. ONly you know which title will be the best since you know things in the story that we don't. Anyways, how about this ...

OK, This is way shorter than the previous part. You can skip the first chapter if you wish, but read the first part of the second chapter in order to ...

thank you tennis princess, dark star and Matt!! Thanks a lot all of you...

Sorry if it is too long. I'll post the other part of this chapter soon. Reading the previous chapter will help you understand the story better but you can start ...

Thanks Sapphire! I am tired I will make the changes tomorrow... And I'll keep in mind what you said!