fromnz

Hey guys. This is my first shot at writing poetry. Sleep isn't an easy thing to come by for me so I decided to write about it. Some parts don't ...

Hey first of all I really like your poem. I also think that how you included that persons name was really awesome and creative. Another thing, your poem seemed like ...

Hey I love your title! Whether I read or review something depends on the title and yours really captured me. Anyway I dont get the whole 4th July thing since ...

Hey since everyone else has gone over the faults I'd just like to say that I love this poem! I think it has a very valid point and that your ...

Hey, first of all im gunna go over what I dont get/like. Your rhyme scheme is a tad over the top and it kinda ruins the flow of your poem ...

Please review running for you. I also need a new title

Wow. This is awesome as!! I also especially like the last line. I think you had an 'And' somewhere that could do with being removed other than that this poem ...

My arms are pumping, lungs burning. I cant get enough oxygen. It doesn't matter, I push myself harder blotting out all evidence of pain from my mind and body. The ...

Hey. I love your story, I really don't have anything to criticise other than why haven't you continued the story, this is one well worth continuing. The only other thing ...

Hey, I love this poem but there is just one thing that doesnt seem quite right and it is this line And the daybreak of tomorrow, Is the ending that ...

Hey i really like this poem. The only part that doesnt seem to fit is the last stanza And nature has grown too old, And laws have all been bent. ...

That was great. Are you from New Zealand?

Cheers for reviews, yes im from New Zealand. Born and Bred. Its a wonderful place. This is the start of a first draft. Im not going to change the part ...

Hey this is really good. I like how you have described your feelings. Great job

Hey, this is my first attempt at writing. I know it doesn't sound like a romantic story at the moment but it develops into one later on. Also its not ...