frocks36

There were a few spelling mistakes. Like this on Candise spelled candis. I recommend you do a draft then read it and correct it on Microsoft word or something. Then ...

This chapter was great and revealed so much mystery that eluded my mind. I find that each chapter gets greater and greater.

I think you did much better description on chapter 1 than you did on the prologue. You made a spelling mistake though.

It was very exciting for a prologue. Which is good. I think you should give more description. But that isn't really much of a problem. I think it is a ...