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  • Short Story » General, General Re: The First Time

    Hey, foxfire here... The story overall from my perspective tells of a relationship between sisters and the events in the forest. Overall, the story has a sense of atmosphere and ...

    Jul 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: From the outside looking in.

    It’s a lovely piece and the twist in the end is very good but there is one thing that confused me. Who is I? The words, “I was the epitome ...

    Feb 25, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: A Taste of Bitterness

    Okay, Claire…the story seems interesting in the way that the character is a mystery and that we want to know more about her and to shed the shell of her ...

    Feb 25, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Blame it on the rain pt.1

    hey, loveless, foxfire ehre at your service....i'm here to comment your work! PS: i suck at commenting grammar cause i'm bad at it too Okay, Loveless, I really like the ...

    Feb 15, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: An Excellant Bargain

    hey, foxfire here at your service...i'm here to comment your work! Okay, I like the curse theme of the story especially with the dress as well the use of metaphors ...

    Feb 15, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Questions in the Dark

    “How much do you value life?” The man asked, if he was a man. In this first paragraph, try to show us that the “man” is a man but do ...

    Feb 13, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Breakfast Troubles - Sunny Side Up!

    “Seven forty-five...!" I just realized... I'm about to be late for school. Try to five us an impression of what the character is feeling or her expression when she realized ...

    Feb 13, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Ultimate productivity

    hey, acta, i'm here to review your work 8) The hallway was silent. Through the windows the faint whistling of the breeze could be heard, enticing and endeavoring to the ...

    Feb 10, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Beast is Dead Chapter 2

    I burst through the doors and slowed to a brisk walk towards the main office. There was barely anyone left out, only a couple of other late teens shoving stuff ...

    Feb 10, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Over Coffee

    Hey, this is foxfire here at your service. Your story is interesting because it gives a lot of happenings within these two people and this mystery seemed to be added ...

    Feb 8, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Beast is Dead: Prolouge and Chapter 1

    hello, jasmine! i'm here to critique your work...sorry if its a bit harsh She was never smarter. I could reassure myself that as amazing as she seemed to be she ...

    Feb 8, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Talking to the Dead

    This is an interesting story and it raises the question of life after death and more specifically the ability for the dead to communicate with the living. I had like ...

    Feb 5, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: My first story!

    Okay, bubbles…here it is! Firstly, I like the sarcastic comedy in this story. I like the contrast between the gradma’s behaviour on Hawaii and Barbie land. And one question, why ...

    Feb 5, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Do or Do Not? (Short Story)

    I: a thought Oh, I got this, its suicide (in some way-bets she’s going to the suicide woods). Okay, the story was dark and it was depressing in sort. I ...

    Feb 3, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: In Which a Little Girl Dies. (Rated for Disturbingness)

    I: A Thought interesting story. Gore and surreal, I like the essence of mysteriousness in here especially the character of Carla or Caroline. II: Characters My first thought when I ...

    Feb 3, 2010


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