forgottenfallen

Instead of music, how about some like 'Dynasty'? Something that sounds beautiful and inspirational, like some music is.

Her lush white teeth scraped against my neck, her pale hands grasping at the material on my coat desperately. I shivered with intense fear and my wings fluttered, and then ...

Just a word of advice, for every post you submit you have to write at least 3 reviews for other people ( 1 post-at least 3 reviews ) My advice ...

I like the way this poem is written and the basic concept. My only criticism would be the change in tone, e.g: A sweet fairytale, you seem to be, a ...

“Lexus!” A shrill voice shouted in my ear, sounding still silky even with the loud volume. She shook me with her long-fingered hands. I had already been half awake, the ...

Meave and Sera....what interesting and beautiful names for your characters! It really enhances the way you think about their personality if they aren't just called 'John and Jane' Some really ...

Honey, your story is here to be judged :) If you want to publish it, apply for a copyright number for you to post at the bottom of each piece ...

A good idea on the whole for a poem, I like it. Just with a poem its a expression of feeling, not an excuse to write another random sentence to ...

“Where are we going, may I ask?” I asked so quietly that I thought she might not have heard. But, sure enough, she turned around to reply. Her expression was ...

I've editted it throughly to your points Fire, thank-you x And anyway, this is what I want Lexine to look like! I know all of you got in a bit ...

What an amazing idea for a poem! I might do that when I can't think of anything to write next time, thanks x My only point would be to stop ...

I personally think you should keep it as 'Untitled', it drew me in because it seemed like a deliberate mistake and sounded great. My only critism would be to stop ...

I love that, sounds a little like emo poetry. Was that your target audience> My only points: You killed me, killed me to death. I really don't think this makes ...

Early morning opened into the sky, the bands of orange light rising into the blue, like a sunset in reverse. Not a car was on the road on the New ...

Sounds like the start of a really cute little story, I like it :) But just remember: Each new speaker has a new line, because speech is important! And what ...