forgottenfallen

This is the first chapter I have read of this, so I am judging the writing not the story line. We walked shoulder to shoulder, along the bank of the ...

Hi!!! Firstly, if I was you, I would wait until I had written a little bit more before I posted, because your post can be as long as you want ...

I expected warmth, but her skin was cold, like a gemstone which you had picked off the ground. Beads of sweat were across her forehead, even though it was snowing. ...

My only point would be don't bend yourself backwards and change your poem to make the lines rhyme. Forgotten xxx PS: You're not 13.

Thanks. So this is going to all start when we have all the needed characters? I really think this will be awesome! :D

2009 was the worst year I have seen, lets all write for our lifes and inspire so this year will be much better! But it was only us, as people, ...

This definetly reminds me of myself, but 2009 wasn't the best year ever, right? It was bad for all of us on all sides. Maybe this year all of us ...

My only crit would be to say more about the scenery and make your chapters longer. You could pull each of those scenes out a lot more.

I think she totally ruined Breaking Dawn with Renesmee appearing, I could have thought of a much better ending! I am personally Team Volturi, because at the end of BD ...

I like the way you have drawn this, its kinda Manga/Anime style by the way you ahve done the face and the body. You have some talent, how long did ...

I'll be the Squad 5 Captain. Name: Pheonix Kaden Squad Number/Rank: (Captain, Lieutenant, Soul Reaper) Captain Squad 5 Age: (In the Soul Society, you can live for hundreds of years) ...

I see 'emo' poetry as being a uneditted show of emotion, just what you say and how you want to say it. No rules. As an 'emo' myself, I just ...

Happy to review any piece of writing, no matter how long, short, complicated, simple, and any genre. In return can you please review one part of my story, Angels and ...

I don't get why people keep on thinking hes a girl He says right at the start 'Lexine Torn. It was a meaningful yet meaningless name, not even really correct ...

Hello! I love the idea of this story, I know I'm not 16 and shouldn't have beern reading it...:) Just one thing. Alice’s eyes widen; she grits her teeth and ...