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Updated with more work! :)

Hiya! x As all the other reviews said, the first thing I thought was 'cliche!' This could put some people off, so try thinking about a more exciting or 'different' ...

Edited to AddictiontoFiction's points :)

Hiya! Well, when people say some peoples stories don't f-l-o-w, yours definitely did! You need to think about breaking up some of your sentences. Heres an example, and how you ...

I would just like to thank everybody for the amount of help I got on EVERY part of Angels and Vampires so far!!!!! :) Its been so helpful, and its ...

I would just like to thank everybody for the amount of help I got on EVERY part of Angels and Vampires so far!!!!! :) Its been so helpful, and its ...

I would just like to thank everybody for the amount of help I got on EVERY part of Angels and Vampires so far!!!!! :) Its been so helpful, and its ...

Hiya! x This was a very short extract, but I found it quite effective. So down to the review? “Run, Uri. Run.” The voice came through the trees. Nice start. ...

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Chapter One Hiya! Well, I loved your story. I had hardly any critisms, and enjoyed reading it. Normally, I don't like stories that are told from the 'outside view', where ...

Hiya! Pro-log Just a quick point, easy mistake to make though :) 'Prologue' I loved this prologue, I like the way you use the dictionary quote. Its really creative. You ...

2 years later Thought by thought, I had grown more assertive. Heartbeat after heartbeat, I'd grown braver. Step by step, I grew stronger. And it was all for the one ...

Written to the beautiful tale behind the song 'Where We Belong' I panicked and screamed, but Patience trapped my mouth before the noise got too loud. It couldn't have been ...

Noone of you get that she jsut drew over it :) It's a picture of her boyfriend. I congratulate you, but thwe face is a bit dar. How about white ...

You know you are a nerd when you quit Drama and Music to do Triple Maths on Thursday.