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Re: Down To Heaven, Up To Hell
Thanks... is the ending any better? I still don't know if I like it or not.
Oct 15, 2005 -
Re: You Were Not Meant To Die
To explain the story behind the poem: Brook Krogel was a girl a met through swimming last year. She was really sweet and didn't look down on underclassmen like most ...
Oct 15, 2005 -
Re: A Complacent Beginning
Wisps of wind pull at my hair and threads of heat flit about my toes. I curl up on the rocking chair near the steps, barely hearing my father and ...
Oct 15, 2005 -
Re: You Were Not Meant To Die
Today was not meant to take you away. We did not know it would come. We did not see you vanishing into the mist of eternity I watched you fly ...
Oct 15, 2005 -
Re: Sunset
(since you were being nice and critiquing my poems, I decided to be nice and come check your out! :D ) I love the way you explained how you feel, ...
Oct 11, 2005 -
Re: Smile
Wait, Bobo, you've confused me... can you send me an example of what you consider "true poetry". I'd just like to get an idea of what you mean... right now ...
Oct 11, 2005 -
Re: Royal Engagment (chaper one)
:D
Oct 7, 2005 -
Re: Favorite YWS Member
Well MY favorites are all the newbies (probably includes me :D ), and Darkersarah because I love her avatar!!!
Oct 7, 2005 -
Re: Royal Engagment (chaper one)
Your... grammar... is... driving... me... crazy... Please fix the spelling and grammar ASAP. It's killing a potentially great story! I like your dtory idea and I hope you'll continue writing ...
Oct 6, 2005 -
Re: Untitled
I definitely think it could use linebreaks. However, you do portray your feelings well and I must say I like that a lot. Try separating your thoughts more and try ...
Oct 6, 2005 -
Re: An Angel For Me
I'm not sure why, but I really liked how "gone" and "song" don't rhyme in the 3rd stanza. It breaks it up a bit and keeps the rhyming from sounding ...
Oct 6, 2005 -
Re: Smile
Smile My eyes ache when they watch your face, refusing to smile, smile like you did a long time ago in the bright light of the sun you sparkled, a ...
Oct 5, 2005 -
Re: This would be me... ... ....
It's just some cool-looking tower blue-things-ish. I really have no clue, but the pic i wanted was too big and this looked awesome... so i'm using it! :D
Oct 5, 2005 -
Re: This would be me... ... ....
I get to talk about ME!?! talk about me and not get critiqued... wow! I like this.... Hmm, let's see. I'm Lisa... yoha_ahoy recruited me whenever she recruited me... Now ...
Oct 4, 2005 -
Re: Hello....again I shall do this...
... I hope your dad doesn't die... or if he does, not too soon. :(
Oct 4, 2005