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Hi, I liked this very much too! The description was excellent, and the way you wrote was so...clear and interesting. :) Can't wait to see what happens. Great job!

Hi, I really liked this!! It was, as the others said, unique. You wrote it very well, I really felt Gen's pain. :( Awesome work!! :)

Hi, I liked the idea of this piece, but like everyone said, even though it could've been really dark and suspenseful, it wasn't. Just try to describe the scene a ...

Will do, thanks everyone! :)

The problem with Paolini is that he looked like a nerd when he published, and still looks and sounds like a nerd now. I don't see how looking like a ...

Awww..c'mon..don't you think you guys are being a little hard on Paolini? Everyone KNOWS he's not even near being as awesome a writer as Tolkien, or CS Lewis. But cut ...

Or how about those guys that want to, in the name of Islam, kill all of us? I don't think the real, true Muslims would consider people like Osama Bin ...

That is so cruel, I could cry. Some people are really cruel.

That's horrible. Who would do that? :x

Because our history teachers are actually historical figures in disguise. Why do frogs exist?

Hi, It was good, but I think it had more questions than answers. Maybe you could try giving a little more information on why she was sad. But avoid INFO-DUMPS. ...

Hi, I liked this story. :) The romance was so cute! :D But, I would have liked to know a little more about Yvette. A little description of physical features ...

I feel the same way most of the time, too. My advice is to, like the others aid, write ANYTHING!!! Or, if you really don't feel writing, maybe take a ...

I agree with all the above advice. Subplots, more description, and character development. But don't try to make it so long that it becomes ridiculous. A story should only be ...

Hi, She was shivering and frightened and wanted to go home. I don't know, in the style of the rest of the piece, this sounds out-of-place. It doesn't sound like ...