flytodreams

Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix by the legendary JK Rowling, and Little Women by Louisa M. Alcott.

How do I signal a flashback coming up? For example, should I type FLASHBACK followed by the actual flashback, or: Memories filled her head. She had been ten years old ...

7/10, because I don't get the first line, but I loove the second one.

Yep, I love that game! Hence the inspiration for my character name, Rhen. :D

Harry Potter , because I've heard of Twilight and New Moon , but haven't read them. And I haven't even heard of the others.

I don't like/love my writing, and I don't dislike/hate my writing. I think it's okay, and could be a lot better.

I knew Lewis was friends with Tolkien. I read somewhere they would meet in a pub or something?? LOL, figures. Friends. Writing Geniuses. Both two of my favorite authors. :D

Underneath all the ripping-off is an okay book. I'm not a big fan of Inheritance , but the first book was okay. The second book, not so much. Way too ...

He was always doing this. Just because he was two years older than her did not mean that she couldn’t take care of herself. On the contrary, Cat was an ...

I'm terrible at reviewing, so, obviously, I couldn't see anything wrong with this. It was dark and really haunting. Good job! I'd like to see more.

he said softly and leaned over, kissing her on her red-rose lips long and hard. I think 'red-rose' should be 'rose-red'. But isn't that like an overused way to describe ...

Chapter 1 Razors of Death Rhen smiled at her best friend while folding a shirt. “I’m going to miss you Lila.” Lila hugged Rhen. “Just promise to write at least ...

It was great! I'm sorry I can't find anything wrong with it...:( But it was nice, and I wonder what was up with the reflection that wasn't hers..:D

I agree with the above critiques. Otherwise, the story was pretty good! :)

Yes, there is a little too much info-dumping in Sira's part. Like someone else said, show, don't tell. And try spacing out the paragraphs so it doesn't look like a ...