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Thanks Critical_Point! I've redone the prologue, changed the story completely though. :oops:

Be prepared.. :lol: I have NO experience when it comes to poetry, hence my opinion can't really count, but I really like this! Your style, the wording, the idea, it ...

"This is 10 percent luck, 20 percent skill, 15 percent concentrated power of will. 5 percent pleasure, 50 percent pain." From Remember The Name by Fort Minor. I CANNOT write ...

"I would want it to be burnt down. Fire is amazing." ~ Zakulas. "I wouldn't want the world to be destroyed at all!" ~ Liam. "Whatever, just let me die ...

Hiya everyone! Please be brutally honest with this. :) Chapter 1 Surprise, surprise Liam lay back in his wooden seat, observing all the members of the Honorable Sword and the ...

Hello WOAH. You completely threw me off-balance there! First you start with a fantasy name and setting, and then you throw in modern technology and dialogue. That was a bit ...

Hi again, I found nothing wrong with this. It was awesome! I love the dialogue, and I love Amarion. :) Keep writing!

Hiya, I really like this! The plot, or what of it you revealed, sounds really interesting. The sentences flowed very well. But the vanishing-with-a-puff-of-smoke thing at the end didn't sound ...

Heya, I think you really should add the fantasy element in, or anything else that's suspenseful, because this seems too boring. :( The style, and flowing, was fine, but if ...

Perfect characters? You mean Edward Cullen? :lol: As mentioned, flawed characters are far more believable...although I do have urges to create flawed characters now and again. xD.

Heya This was...amazing. I have no experience with horror-fantasy, but this was just a pure masterpiece. I really loved your writing style. With this piece, you managed to hit the ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! :) I'm flytodreams...you may address me as Q. If you need reviews, just contact moi. Enjoy.

Hey there, I really really really liked this!! Lol. The vocabulary, your style, everything was just flawless. I haven't read Thirry's story. Is this a prologue to it, or...?

Hiya, Matt realized that his lungs were crying for oxygen and he loudly gulped for air. It flows better if you type 'gulped loudly' instead of 'loudly gulped'. Like archer123 ...

Hiya! It was really good. :D I found it very interesting, and your writing style is very lucid. You could add a little more description though, to balance out the ...