flytodreams

So I tried to visit your side once or twice, but you’d changed. I found out you weren’t just on the other side, but in a completely different world- one ...

The homuculus smiled as it drew in power. Now the mortals would see! It grinned, its little heart racing. That bumling professor had no idea what he created. Now he ...

Yep, you could have described some more, but otherwise, I'm interested to see where this story goes. :)

Glad to see someone finally took my advice! Sometimes I feel like I'm explaining things to a brick wall. Excuse me?! Hey, this prologue was much better than the first. ...

It's pretty good. :)

Neutral. :| Bored. :roll: And thoughtful, considering it's my sister's 6th birthday, day after tomorrow. :)

I haven't read it yet. But I'm going to, very soon.

Yeah, it seemed a little empty, because there was barely any description.But I liked the beginning sentences. :D Minos reminds me of Peeves from HP, but maybe that's because I'm ...

Hi, I'm flytodreams. This prologue was much too short, and it didn't really catch my interest. Plus, it was more like a first chapter. Nothing out-of-the ordinary happened, you know? ...

I take an ordinary word, or an existing name, and twist it around. :D

I think a chapter should only be as long as it needs to be. :) Not devilishly looooooooooooooooooong, and not one-scene-short. :)

3 fantasy novels, two fanfics.

Plotwise, it's ace, but not grammar-wise. I suggest using a Spelling and Grammar check if you have Microsoft Word. :D

I don't think you should write more. It's NOT that this wasn't good, but I just think it's pretty fine by itself. :) But everyone else knows more than me, ...

Hi, I didn't notice anything wrong with this story, I found it totally interesting. What's up with Lucy's dreams? Why are they filled with snow? It really held my interest. ...