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Hi! The edits in this piece are in caps... Not sure where I am going with this, I just was bored so I started writing. I may write more, not ...

Alright, so it seems like the other reviewers dealt with all of the nitpicks I had for this story. So, I guess I'll deal with the conceptual stuff... :P ~Development ...

Glasses of wine and and cups filled with sin, I'm assuming the two and's are just a typo mornings of thought following nights filled with gin intentions they fall and ...

The legs do look a little weak and disconnected. But, other than that, this is amazing!!! I would sooo keep it, even though it looks a bit dangerous ;)...Anyway, great ...

God, I can't stop laughing hysterically. Haha, I loved how the poem is sooo bright and un-reasonably happy. I love the transition between the happiness and unhappiness. It has a ...

Haha, I love this picture...especially with the random person standing in the corner looking confused... :P. And, the part with the angry sun and the maze with pacman eating the ...

Chapter 3 : Epiphanies "Of all the girls tossing rocks at your window. I'll be the one waiting there even when it's cold ~ Taylor Swift "Rach?" Clay called. "Huh?" ...

Alone in this room, That's full of people. Alone in my heart, That yearns only for him. Talking to everyone, A smile plastered on my face. Can't anyone see through ...

Great poem here, Princess...I'm really sorry that this happened to you. I'm glad you were able to talk about it, in such a way. I loved how this poem was ...

'Kay, this has already been nitpicked by the other reviewers. So, I guess I'll deal with the concept-ish stuff... 1) Theme -- Absolutely loved it. It's unique and something I ...

'Kay so, bad stuff first (because y'know I'm just pessimistic like that :twisted: ) We walk on the little curb, Little is an icky word twin. Use something else, like ...

Wow, just wow. I can't believe that a 17-year old just wrote that. I mean that was unbelievable. It was the kind of story that I can't find much wrong ...

Wow, this is really good...such a nostalgic theme...I didn't notice anything wrong with it. I actually thought that the rhyme scheme was good and I think it flowed pretty naturally. ...

Punctuation issues, which I've fixed here: So what? I didn't know You knew, but you didn't let me know I expected it, but in so I was unprepared, lost in ...

OhMyGod, this was hilarious. The rhyme in this felt natural and flowed really well. I didn't see any rhythm problems. But, I can't punctuate for my life, so... Google is ...