flowerchild

The delicate balance of music and song can be heard as he plays along, to the tune and melody of my heart and his love for me.

I would never be ablr to write anything like that. It is so well writen I could see it in a book of musical poems. It is a little suggestive ...

Wow. that was great. Selene Black. that ending was awesome. please write more. the only thing was that you switched from Lily and Rosie on and off.

Well It's pretty good. Maybe if you made more of a finish.Good for standing up for yourself. I can't weight for more!

Wow! That's like the first of the seventh book! I don't think that Harry wouldn't want to go back to Hogwarts but you may have a point. I don't know ...

javascript:emoticon(':lol:')I've edited this Haiku once already. I hope it's okay. "For those who don't no what a Haiku is" it is a 17 syllable poem normally about nature.

She stood a lonely tree by the rivers high bank. There she weeps no more.

Nice! The flow was good. I'm only 10, but I do read poetry. it sound like something I've read before in school from a good book, so, you must be ...

I described my feelings of a hot day from the opinion of a kid who has abusive or alchahol addicted addicted parents/guardian

Hot against my cheek you make my neck burn my skin is hot and wet. You want to be inside but you can't because of the anger there it almost ...

This is the first time I've written something like this and I don't know if I'm that good. There is more coming! Alot more!

My ideas stopped.

WHOA! That was breathtaking. you should write more. A sequel or something. I would read a book like that for sure! Try to fix the spelling though.

You did well typing it in the correct way but you might want to try getting your on topic as do others. It was cool how you rewrote some of ...

You kinda waver over different subjects but your verses are really neat.