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  • Other Re: An Elwick Tragedy

    If there was a divine force that could stop the monotonous cracking of my knuckles to the tick of a metronome that has been set up counting the seconds to ...

    Mon May 10, 2010 3:06 am
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Killing Me Softly

    You have just taken a cliche and overused idea and made it your own. Applaud yourself. Who would ever think to use smell to portray an idea? Touch and sight ...

    Sat Aug 01, 2009 2:34 pm
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Killing Me Softly

    Canned in the fragrance's prevalence, I cried out in hysteria, only to recieve a delicious mouthful of the scent that made my shaking body tense. Aren't you scared I'll leave? ...

    Sat Aug 01, 2009 2:14 am
  • Other Re: Purple

    I don't think we're all meant for greatness. I know that I am not, certainly. I twist my body and mind to find a route out-120 pounds search for the ...

    Mon Jul 27, 2009 3:39 am
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Miss-placed Affection

    You deserve a better critique than I am able to give you, but I will do my best to explain what I thought about this poem. I enjoyed how you ...

    Sat Jul 11, 2009 11:51 pm
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Famished

    I like what you're trying to say, I just have trouble with a few inconsistencies. Poetry itself certainly does not have to rhyme or follow a distinct rhythmic (or other) ...

    Tue Jul 07, 2009 11:16 pm
  • Lyrics Re: Graduation Day

    What type of music is this set to? And how fast are your stanzas sung? Like June said, it's difficult to critique without proper information, but I will try my ...

    Tue Jul 07, 2009 9:16 pm
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Rosa never swims with me.

    Though I despise giving pointless reviews, seeing as others have conveyed more helpful advice than I could ever give, I must say I am in love with your title. It ...

    Tue Jul 07, 2009 8:56 pm
  • Other Re: Time's Tounge

    If time could stretch its deep voice over life's repitition and caress my starving ears, it would have nothing to say. I am not helpless nor blind nor ignorant of ...

    Sat Jun 27, 2009 9:42 pm
  • Scripts Re: My Truth

    hopefully this is easier to read

    Sat Jun 06, 2009 3:02 pm
  • Other Re: Ever The Same

    Maybe it’s because we’re different. All that I aspire to be reflects directly through your face, but you can’t see. My reasoning for this is simply that I hold the ...

    Wed Jun 03, 2009 4:06 am
  • Scripts Re: My Truth

    Thank you! I'll work on trying to clear up a few things. I really appreciate the response (:

    Tue Jun 02, 2009 4:01 am
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Interdigitating With Myself

    The half of my sanity that traced itself around the cold pavement froze as soon as it had appeared. I was lost without a sound or care. I did not ...

    Tue Jun 02, 2009 3:57 am
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Alone?

    Okay, just letting you know, I will never be able to top the critique by Demeter, but I can let you know what I thought (: The emotion is certainly ...

    Tue Jun 02, 2009 3:56 am
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Rejection

    Wow, i really enjoyed your imagery and use of diction. Rejection is definitely something that everyone has (or will) experience at one time or another and having just been rejected, ...

    Tue Jun 02, 2009 3:49 am


I understand what you're saying, and your comments are valuable, but I'm gonna ignore your advice.
— Roald Dahl