fireheartedkaratepup

Haha, I started this in my head on a walk, then quit about where I say forget this. , In case you couldn't tell. XD It amuses me, so I'm ...

I love this, I'm tired, I can't think of a critique, I'm sorry. :P I like Onion Stew. Tis true. I don't get the transition to laundry in Paper Foxes, ...

Thanks for the reviews, guys! It's so nice to get feedback. ^_^

I'm with Kathy. I kinda freakin love this. I cahn see why you'd leave it as sing--doesn't make sense, but fits with the rhyme. Some of it seems a bit ...

Oh yeah, forgot to say--I don't like the lines. They're not necessary--any pauses/etc in the song should be added vocally (except for the mandatory different lines/stanzas, of course.) I think ...

HAHAHAHAHA WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWW MrMcnasty really had fun there! (Yes, I know his real name is something different.) I'm not sure if I never want him to review my stuff, or if ...

I don't think this should be in poem format. It's too conversational and not poetic enough. As a piece, it's pretty good--you have some good thoughts. However, these are thoughts ...

Not sure where this came from, or if this is the right category, or if the spoiler thing is for things that give away elements of the piece or just ...

Hokay then, I'll just shoot for second place. Seriously, this is REALLY good. I like the ending--it's a good place to leave off, and leaves the reader wanting more. At ...

I'm gonna be completely honest. I wasn't very impressed. You should either use "curly black hair" just "the back of my head." And what happened with the jocks? Did they ...

A young girl, with eager blue eyes and wavy blond hair, stared at one of her classmates impatiently. "It's... Good, Lisa," her classmate replied. The young girl, Lisa, frowned slightly. ...

Aha, here's something. In the first stanza you were referring to the person you're listening to as "her", and now suddenly she's "you". I would fix this. That threw me ...