fireheartedkaratepup

Be as critical as you possibly can, please. I feel kinda bad about asking cuz Mustard's already reviewed, but..........I want this to really shine, so I want as much feedback ...

Love the message. Very nice. The flow is a little jerky for me, and it should be you're instead of your in stanza 5, line 1. Also, I think there ...

I love them. They're beautiful. my beloved, hooded coat had finally fallen to pieces; patching patches I'd change the ; to a --. I love the My sister had a ...

Writer's Block: Relatable. Very much so. I'd remove the commas in the first stanza from the poem. Because of the line breaks, they're not necessary. Also, " For every one ...

RE: The Diedas Touch: Actually, the original story of the king who turned to gold everything he touched technically also killed everything he touched. He just didn't live in the ...

As long as he doesn't try to hurt my dragons, there's a chance we might make it work. Win.

Now, as for "Do I actually want a Prince Charming?" .....yes and no. There's an interesting book called Captivating which says there are three core desires of a woman's heart: ...

Prince Charming: fairytale version: +Is perfectly handsome. No skin flaws. Chiselled jaw. Nice clothes. Other such things. +Rescues the princess from an evil monster. Is brave. +Falls in love with ...

THANK YOU. I was afraid it was real.

MeanMrMustard. True dat. He gives extremely honest, extremely thorough reviews. They're quite amazing actually. Third that. Harsh, but honest. Also Jash. I found out about YWS through her, and shes' ...

She has another one. I........... I'm actually crying right now. (Which is funny, I don't normally.) IT'S EVEN MORE STUPID. I'M NOT EVEN JOKING.

I refer to a lot of people as young old wise fools. To me, it makes perfect sense--young at heart, old in body; young in body, old in mind--wise about ...

I love it. You'll hear people say "Show, don't tell"--meaning, do exactly what you've done here. Good job. And yeah, I read this really quickly, so it's a bit hard ...

Yeahhhh..... it doesn't quite flow. Sometimes it's awesome, sometimes it needs work. Overall, I like it. ..................I blame my short review on Mustard's review before mine. She's better than I ...

O.o ............ My new goal is to one day be this epic.