finishedmakingsense

This was really heartfelt. You showed the reader your emotions really well, and I could feel that come through the entire piece. I'm sorry that you had to go through ...

Review please :3 It's a beginning (if I ever carry on) of a story with a lot a breakdowns and too many questions. Thank you in advance.

I'm not a big fan of this. You could improve it a lot just by some simple editing. My main problem is that you switch tenses a lot. If you ...

So I didn't like this too much. You jumped around a lot, and left me sort of confused. With some editing, you can make it work. Her light brown hair ...

I loved the plot. It sounds really interesting and funny, and I can't wait to read more. The title gave me an Of Mice and Men parody expectation, but oh ...

Hey, could you review this? It's a romantic short story. Thanks in advance!

Emma I couldn't sleep. I never could that year, not with all those questions constantly floating around in puddles in my mind. I'd never thought that I'd be like this- ...

Sliding into the front seat I grip the steering wheel tightly, first day of school. Junior year, second year at this school. Transferred halfway through freshman year, forced to attend ...

My writing is sort of a scribble between the two. It's pretty illegible and I hate it most of the time. Writing unjoined usually just takes too long for me. ...

“I bought you a rose.” She plucked it from his hands gingerly, quickly. He smiled chivalrously. “Please, I don't-” her exasperated words were cut of in mid-stride. “Can't you see ...

I really loved this. It's a beautiful piece. The main problem that I have it with the character having Autism. I don't know too much about it, but my mom's ...

^^ if you wouldn't mind Just ignore the messed up tense thing, this is an earlier version and the newer one is on a different computer. I may post if ...

People from New England say wicked. As in, that was wicked awesome. We also somehow find ways of using 'nasty' and 'sick' in ways that mean awesome. Such as; "Dude, ...

Beautiful. It made me smile and frown at the same time. It sounds like it could be the excerpt to a novel, and 2nd person sounds strange in that context. ...

Hey :smt003 The first thing I'm going to say is to keep on writing. You can only get better by practicing, and it seems as though you just haven't had ...