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Wow That is some emotional poetry.I think that you have good rhythm in the poem because nothing seems forced. If I were you I might try spreading the questions throughout ...

Your pictures are so beautiful. I love the first one of the rose. I don't like the second one as much because there is something in the shadow of the ...

Is the whole thing meant to be a metaphor? All there is is hurt Only one is. I admire your use of symbolism in this poem. I thought that you ...

I love your piece of writing. Your descriptions and attention to detail are awesome. I have one little nitpick All around him are tiny mirrors in the black blanket, each ...

I liked this story and I have a few nitpicks... She wasn’t a rather handsome woman though. Handsome woman, really? I think handsome is usually used to describe a man ...

I liked this story. I think you could make to time period of the of the story clear because I cant tell if this is in the past or the ...

This story reminds me of the murdering cult started by Charles Manson. I wish you would have provided some background of how James went crazy and got the idea to ...

That was interesting. This story left me feeling confused. Is the girl hallucinating and acting delusional because she is not breathing or is it because she is dreaming. The biggest ...

I am so sorry that you feel so depressed. I think one thing that you have to realize that you have no control over what your parents do. You may ...

I enjoyed this experimental piece of writing. I think that it is interesting to imagine who the main character, the voice of the writing is talking to.Maybe it is someones ...

This is great for your first poem. Your rhythm is really good and I like your use of couplets I do have a couple of suggestions... They will not exist ...

This scene seems a little bit like rape because she is so young and he is so old and he is also forcing her to kiss him. So I might ...

I liked your short story and I loved you descriptive word choice. I do have a couple of suggestions for you.. Simon stood stagnantly I don't like that you used ...

I think that you have a great descriptive poem. I have to say that I like the second part over the first. This is my favorite part... Circus freaks with ...

I have read some of the short stories today and I am starting to notice a disturbing trend. People think they don't need to add background information just because it ...