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I like the topic being addressed in your poem. If I were you I would take out the line that talks about the hamburgers that make us so fat. If ...

Does anyone have any interesting, new ideas on what to write about this coming week? A new topic that you would like to suggest or a new story you would ...

It is a nice poem. What does knowing its coming mean?

Please break up your story into paragraphs. Also who is the narrator in your story ? Overall it is a unique idea. If I were you I would change some ...

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I have no idea what it's supposed to mean it's a tiny little color poem I put together in literally two minutes because I was board. I thought it would ...

Nice poem! I noticed one mistake when you said It makes me feel week I think you meant to say weak. Have a nice day

oh... ok thanks. I have read some of your other poetry and it is really good. I don't really know how to swim so that explains why I was so ...

"Before you were here, so suddenly in my life,it was black and white and faded.But there you are, happy to make me better." I think that you should consider revising ...

I am a little confused. What are the butterflies trying to escape from? In your poem it says they keep hitting the wall. what is the wall around ? I ...

:lol: Ha Ha Ha I loved it . I also love fries. You should write a poem about chocolate or Superman Ice cream.

It such a tiny poem I'm not sure what to think of it. I think you should elaborate on your last line. Have a glorious day :mrgreen:

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I thought it was good. You should an analysis of M.L.K.'s "I have a dream" speech. Have a good day Fiction

I thought it was very interesting. You did a good job even thought I didn't read chapter one I can understand it. I noticed some mistakes you might want to ...